marching with its shadow the millipede casts doubt
GRIX
Statement:
The millipede may be small but it can create quite the illusion of grandeur! My haiku was inspired by this video: https://youtu.be/z3RcAzBA6QE.
This ku is also a metaphor for when we humans have to puff ourselves up to feel less intimidated . . . to hide within our protective shadows.
Once I had what I had to say written down, I played with the word choices and arrangement to allow for many readings:
marching / with its shadow / the millipede casts doubt
marching / with its shadow the millipede / casts doubt
marching with its shadow / the millipede casts doubt
marching with its shadow / the millipede / casts doubt
marching with its shadow / the millipede casts / doubt
A fave haiku:
long lunch
walking with butterflies
the ways I can't be shamed
Craig Kittner
Human/Kind 2.1
http://humanhaikujournal.weebly.com/uploads/1/1/6/7/116792551/finalhk2.1.pdf
Statement from Grix:
I had the pleasure of publishing this haiku and it has always stuck with me.
There is such a gentleness to how this poem was crafted – a sense of innocence (e.g. the rhythm in L3 evokes the feeling of skipping). But there is also a palpable sense of self-preservation (e.g. the way each line is gradually longer than the first).
I appreciate the alliteration of the repeated L's and S's, which are noticeable as they roll off the tongue, but not in-your-face. I love that this poem makes me feel so many things at once and has so many potential readings, depending on the interpretation.
Withnail and I:
"My heart's beating like a fucked clock!"
Waiting for Godot:
"And I resumed the struggle."
Grix says: So appropriate for me! 😜
Alan note:
More about Grix:
https://www.grixartistix.com/about.html
See also:
Haiku Society of America Conference - Signature Style: How Identity Informs Voice in Haiku
and
Interview with Julie Bloss Kelsey at The Haiku Foundation's New to Haiku: Advice for Beginners
The links to these features:
https://www.grixartistix.com/presentations.html
About Craig Kittner:
https://twitter.com/craigkittner?lang=en
https://www.pinterest.co.uk/craigkittner/
The Heron's Nest
Volume XXI, Number 4: December 2019
https://www.theheronsnest.com/December2019/haiku-p9.html
Thank you, Alan!
ReplyDeleteIt's an honor and a pleasure!
Deletewarmest regards,
Alan
Alan Summers
Editor-in-chief
Blo͞o Outlier
https://bloooutlierjournal.blogspot.com