Friday 25 June 2021

Bee Jay is breathing and Susan Burch finds a love note

 







i am the joey

breathing in my dead mother’s

pouch



Bee Jay

 








Bee Jay says:

“Sometimes a haiku can take years of thought and revisions. Sometimes one pops out seemingly fully formed. This haiku came out of me suddenly after I spent a few weeks reading experimental haiku and Japanese gendai on social media and in journals such as Heliosparrow, is/let, and Otoroshi.


I placed my fresh haiku into a workshop group to gauge responses and to see how I could improve it, but despite the sentence structure and the personification/anthropomorphism, the reaction to it was very positive, including a surprising request from Alan Summers to submit it to his new journal.”






one favourite haiku and why



I compiled a list of 30 of my fave contemporary haiku and then selected Susan Burch's haiku out of that. 








washed jeans―

his love note

still dirty





Susan Burch


Honourable Mention 4th Annual Senryu Contest, 

Sonic Boom July 2018









Bee Jay says:

“In 2014, Susan Burch was one of the first poets to write constructive comments and expert advice on my haiku and she later gave me the confidence to begin submitting my work. Her haiku and senryu often move me and this one is one of my faves. 


In this poem I see a fresh, new romance where lust and passion colours everything and even the most simple sentence contains sexual innuendo. I can imagine the kinds of words written in that note. The jeans could be hers or his but I prefer to think they’re hers. The love note is ‘still’ dirty which makes me believe she’s read it before. 


On the other hand, there is also the possibility that this is a dark poem about an illicit love affair and that she finds this dirty note in his jeans. This kind of ambiguity is one I admire in a haiku, I luv the idea that a haiku can be seen as positive in one reading and then so negative in another.”





favourite quote from Waiting for Godot

“There's no lack of void.”


Withnail and I

“Give me a Valium, I'm getting the fear.”







Alan note:


Also enjoy my own commentary, as the contest judge, on Susan Burch’s haikai verse:



“Being Human - the ordinary intensity” 

a look at senryu

https://area17.blogspot.com/2018/06/being-human-ordinary-intensity-look-at.html 



Check out Femku guest editor issue with Susan Burch: 


Femku PDF web link: https://69b046c2-a7e1-4a9a-9a22-1c70986eaa24.filesusr.com/ugd/f4c0ea_05ace7dcead141fb9236f9d4460f7f5a.pdf 






Mentioned journals:


is/let: https://isletpoetry.wordpress.com 

  

Otoroshi: https://otoroshijournal.wixsite.com/home 

  

Heliosparrow: https://heliosparrow.com 

  

Sonic Boom: https://sonicboomjournal.wixsite.com/sonicboom 








2 comments:

  1. Alan Summers thank you very much for giving me faith in this poem and for soliciting it.
    Thanks also to Susan Burch for being there for me when I needed some thoughtful, well-considered, critical haiku help.

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    1. Dear Bee Jay,

      Thank you for your kind comments for Susan Burch and this publication.

      warm regards,
      Alan

      Alan Summers
      Founding Editor
      MahMight haiku journal
      https://mahmighthaikujournal.blogspot.com

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